Agreed with the above that the presentation made it more opaque than intended - I also thought the old man’s buddy would have picked up on it, rather than saying “you’re a jerk” afterwards.
@Liamcroft hoping you haven’t gotten much angry internet hate over things like this. You missed the connotations of the quest, but the piece is well-written. My (unsolicited) comment would be to be extra careful, specifically on the verbiage. You used alluded instead of eluded, which is the kind of minor detail that could set the FF crazies off despite the good writing.
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Re: Soapbox: Final Fantasy VII Remake's Cloud Goes From Hero to Zero in a Single Side Quest
Agreed with the above that the presentation made it more opaque than intended - I also thought the old man’s buddy would have picked up on it, rather than saying “you’re a jerk” afterwards.
@Liamcroft hoping you haven’t gotten much angry internet hate over things like this. You missed the connotations of the quest, but the piece is well-written. My (unsolicited) comment would be to be extra careful, specifically on the verbiage. You used alluded instead of eluded, which is the kind of minor detail that could set the FF crazies off despite the good writing.